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JakeAnnalea
I once had a friend.He moved away.

I remember swinging on the tire swing with him in kindergarten.

We had some memories.

I remember the day his daddy beat him,he told me.
We got through it together.

We had some memories.

I remember the day we swam in the creek,splashing around.

We had some memories.

I remember when you didnt come to school that day.

I had some memories.

I remember the day turned into a week,and you finally showed.
You were bruised and hurting.

We had some memories.

I remember your funeral.I was crying.
Then I took a look at your short life with me.

I smiled and thought,we had some memories.

You moved to Heaven and someday I will be there with you.
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JakeAnnalea2 Feb 201024comments
Comments (24)
  • mileycyrus0900 0 mileycyrus0900Did his dad murder him?

    Did his dad beat him to death?

    You did have some memories!

    R.I.P
    kid in poem!
    Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleayeah his dad beat him to death.i miss him every day,but i remember all the fun we had together.Reply
  • Lillylovesyou2 0 Lillylovesyou2That's sad. You should put it into stanzas tho. Like this:

    I once had a friend.
    He moved away.

    I remember swinging on the tire swing with him in kindergarten.
    We had some memories.

    I remember the day his daddy beat him,he told me.
    We got through it together.
    We had some memories.

    I remember the day we swam in the creek,splashing around.
    We had some memories.

    I remember when you didn't come to school that day.
    I had some memories.

    I remember the day turned into a week,and you finally showed.
    You were bruised and hurting.
    We had some memories.

    I remember your funeral.
    I was crying.
    Then I took a look at your short life with me.
    I smiled and thought,we had some memories.

    You moved to Heaven and someday I will be there with you.
    Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleai miss him!Reply
  • Berrygotbanned 0 Berrygotbanned😞Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnalea😞 :cry:Reply
  • ShootingSky9 0 ShootingSky9???The poem had no emotion to me.
    ???To much repeating of "we had some memories"
    ???Follow lilly's advice and make stanzas
    Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleai tryed doing that.i like the poem the way it is.Reply
  • cutiepatootie2 0 cutiepatootie2???The poem had no emotion to me.
    ???To much repeating of "we had some memories"
    ???Follow lilly's advice and make stanzas
    -=-
    True the poem had emotion, but you can feel it through thew words in a way.
    The repeat of "We had some memories" is what made it a poem.
    And yes, you should make it into stanza's, which shouldn't be a problem.
    Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleai will try.Reply
  • cutiepatootie2 0 cutiepatootie2I know you tried to put it in stanza's, but its more like this:
    (SOMEWHAT like this)

    I once had a friend.
    He moved away.

    I remember swinging on the tire swing with him in kindergarten.
    We had some memories.

    I remember the day his daddy beat him,he told me.
    We got through it together.
    We had some memories.

    I remember the day we swam in the creek,splashing around.
    We had some memories.

    I remember when you didn't come to school that day.
    I had some memories.

    I remember the day turned into a week,and you finally showed.
    You were bruised and hurting.
    We had some memories.

    I remember your funeral.
    I was crying.
    Then I took a look at your short life with me.
    I smiled and thought,we had some memories.

    You moved to Heaven and someday I will be there with you.
    Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleathis kid in the poem resembles all poor kids that get abused.Reply
  • majette 0 majetteSad. Oh, and although some people may not call it a poem, sometimes it just helps to get your thoughts down. I know that; I did it recently when my uncle died from cancer. http://www.marapets.com/topics.php?id=2318929&fid=30Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleawell majette,i know exactly how it feels.cancer claimed my Grandma Vina and my Aunt Jill in one year.Aunt Jill had a baby and a 4 year old.Reply
  • majette 0 majetteOh, that's so sad!!! What cancer did they have? My uncle had non-hodgkins lymphoma. (Or however you spell it.)Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleai really dont know what kind they had.but it was horrible.Reply
  • majette 0 majetteHmmm...yeah, I can see how sad you must be.Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleayeah it was really sad.Reply
  • LiCoRiCeThEpRiNcEsS 0 LiCoRiCeThEpRiNcEsStrue story!?!?!?! i'm so sorry!! <333Reply
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleayes it is true.Reply
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